Editing Strategy: Use Plain English

Professionals in specialized fields often make the mistake of thinking that only their specialized language can express their thoughts.  This is usually not true.  Read this jargonized version of a famous line of American poetry.  Although the writer is agile in using jargon, she lost both the meaning and poetic form here:

If I were to ascertain the reasons for my high caliber of distinguished success, I would posit that it irrefutably is related to a particular highway diad in a thickly forested area–a diad at which I optioned to interact with fewer individuals and, consequently, made the decision to go down the diad, known hereafter as “subsume A.”

What a difference between the diads and optioned of the above paragraph and Robert Frost’s  original, beautiful “The Road Not Taken:”

Two roads diverged in a wood, and I–

I took the one less travelled by,

And that has made all the difference.

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