Editing Strategy: Avoid Redundant Phrases

Some phrases used in writing are redundant by definition, such as baby kittens.  What else is a kitten but a baby?  Edit sentences to remove redundancies.  For example, is something absolutely essential or just essential?

The following sentence has redundant phrases galore:  The annual per capita expenditure is $2400 per employee, per year.  Try this approach:  cut the phrase annual per capita, leaving the sentence as The expenditure is $2400 per employee, per year.

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