Editing Strategy: Ask Who Did What?

An easy way to find out if a sentence needs an actor is to ask the question WHO did what?

Look at this sentence:  It is requested that you update the regulations occasionally.

First ask, WHO did what?  Someone (we do not know whom) requests something.  Change the sentence to put in an actor:

The Vice-president of Sales, Marjorie Dunbar, requests that you update the regulations occasionally.

(Note:  Careful readers might notice that occasionally is vague, that it could be replaced by what the recommended time period is.  The Vice-president of Sales, Marjorie Dunbar, requests that you update the regulations yearly.)

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